the ghost(i'll post the other chapters when i'm done with the chapter)

**********CHAPTER 1:GHOST APPEARS**********
jack:come on,we cant let evil come again,
crow:but we cant do anything right now,
ray:what are you two talkin about,
yusei:i'll tell you,a year ago,the dark signers were beaten,but halve a year after that when the Daedalus Bridge was completed,people went missing,but there D-wheelers were still in traffic,it's highly likely that the person behind this is a D-wheeler,lately the Daedalus Bridge has been the area of the disappearances,kiryu and bommer have just disappeared without a trace,
ray:whoa,then whats going to happen to the Daedalus Bridge?
jack:they're have to tear it down,
ray:after all that work,
crow:yes,it'll take a year and a halve to rebuild it,
jack:and we cant finish it while defeating evil,,
ray:well okay,bye,
yusei:hold up,also speed world is forbidden in all duels,even ghosts duels,
*2 hours later*
ray:i never used this D-wheel for a turbo duel,but i've got to help yusei,
ghost:time for your defeat,
ray:i'll beat you at any cost,
ghost:you have the first turn,
ray:i draw,i summon speed warrior in atk mode,then play the spell double summon to summon junk synchron in atk mode,i tune my lv3 junk synchron with my lv 2 speed warrior,Clustering stars will call upon a new force! Become the path its light shines upon! Synchro Summon! Show yourself, Junk Warrior!,i place two cards face-down and end my turn,
ghost:i draw,i activate heavy storm,next i play monster reborn to special summon your speed warrior,then i play brain control to bring your junk warrior to my side of the field,next i attack with both junk warrior and speed warrior,
ray:nnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnooooooooooooooooooooooo.(ray's LP:0)
*crashes*
*blacks out*
*disappears*
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nice, another story. cant wait for more of this.

well that was short lol. but interesting non-the-less. (i dont know what that means. but i know its used in a situation like this lol)


i would just try to make it neater so its easier to read. but it still was intersting. i'll be waiting for the next chapters.

with what Ryan said, try and space out the lines so it will be easier to read, maybe even make the font a little bigger

**CHAPTER 2:the next day**

yusei:jack,crow,have you seen ray.
jack:no.
crow:why?
yusei:i went to his house and found this note.

note wrote:

yusei if you read this i have gone to take on ghost.i wont let the darkness come back.
~ray

jack:i may of found out where ghost is.
yusei:where?
jack:i saw kiryu the other day but he just went to the battlefield of that duel.
crow:the one against rex goodwin?
jack:yes.
yusei:i'm not letting the same thing happen again.
jack:i also heard that at 12:00 AM they will begin the destruction of the daedalus bridge.
crow:then let's hurry and find ghost.
?????:you'll have to get past us first.
yusei:who are you?
???????:it dosnt matter.meet us at the 2 battle field's of destiny.
yusei:who were they.and what did they meen by the 2 battlefield's of destiny?
jack:it could be where you faced kiryu and i faced carly.
crow:well lets go.

well it was easier to read. and the note thing is pretty fancy lol. still with the short chapters though but regardless, i like it. seems interesting.

woah, a little too big i think

**CHAPTER 3:the three battlefield's of destiny**

yusei:okay here we go.
crow:i'll go to the last battlefield.
jack:then lets do this
**20 minutes later**
crow:who you?
???:oh crow dont you remember an old friend when you see them
crow:yes but....wait!!
ray:that's right.it's me ray
crow:what happened?
ray:i dueled ghost and he finished me off in one turn,from that point my only ally was him and darkness
crow:don't protect ghost.
**meanwhile**
yusei:who are you?
?????:you should remember me old friend.
yusei:no,is that you kiryu?
kiryu:that's right.
yusei:but i thought once we defeated rex...
kiryu:you thought wrong.
yusei:don't go back to darkness kiryu
**meanwhile**
jack:who are you
???????:you were never my friend.
jack:okay,so then who are you?
grieger:it's me grieger.
jack:well then let's duel.

thelast wrote:

ok now thats funy

every story i make has at least 1 funny part.
**CHAPTER 4:crow vs ray**
crow:ray,stop this.
ray:you'll have to duel me then.
crow:okay,you have the first turn.
ray:i place 3 face-down's and play the field spell pandemonium end my turn.
crow:i summon blackwing - bora the spear in atk mode and place 2 card's face-down and end my turn.
ray:i summon jester lord in atk mode.it's atk is 4000.now i activate royal decree and atk with jester lord.i end my turn.
crow:i activate mystical space typhoon to destroy royal decree.
ray:now i activate the discord trap.
crow:i activate trap stun.now i summon blackwing - blizzard the north pole and specail summon blackwing - bora the spear.i tune my level 2 blackwing - blizzard the north pole with my level 4 blackwing - bora the spear to synchro summon blackwing armed wing.i attack jester lord with blackwing armed wing and end my turn.
ray:now the effect of trap stun where's off.i activate brain control.i attack with blackwing armed wing.
crow:i activate negate attack.
ray:i set a monster face-down and end my turn.
crow:i attack with blackwing armed wing.
ray:i activate mirror force.
crow:i set a monster face-down and end my turn.
ray:i summon double coston and activate double summon.i sacrifice double coston to summon earthbound immortal wiraqocha rasca.
crow:IMPOSSIBLE,we defeated it.
ray:i activate it's effect and turn your life point's to 1.i end my turn.
crow:listen ray why did you...
ray:i already told you.
crow:listen,dont you remember the note.
ray:but..
crow:ghost is just using you.
*ray faint's*
crow:man.if ray was this hard to beat.i just hope yusei and jack don't lose.
*time 11:00 PM*

not badd. but im confusedd. dont all Earthbound Immortal cards requiar a field spell to be active?

*CHAPTER 5:kiryu vs yusei**
yusei:kiryu,stop this.
kiryu:why should i?
yusei:you were are friend.
kiryu:ghost gave me more power than anyone could.
yusei:what?
kiryu:i have the deck of rex goodwin.
yusei:WHAT!!
kiryu:so let's duel.
yusei:what's your plan?
kiryu:once the bridge is destroyed we can take over the Satellite so we can cover new domino city in darkness.
yusei:i wont let that happen.
kiryu:then we duel.
yusei:you can have the first turn.
kiryu:no you have the first turn.
yusei:then i summon sonic chick in def mode and set 1 card face-down.i end my turn.
kiryu:i specail summon shinto priest of the sun and summon Red Ant Azcatl and i synchro summon sun dragon inti and next i specail summon Stone Statue of the Lamenting God and then i specail summon Dark Tuner - Black Goddess Witaka and activate it's effect and synchro summon Moonlight Dragon Quilla and set 1 card face-down and i end my turn.
yusei:i summon exiled force in atk mode and activate it's effect and destroy sun dragon inti.
kiryu:when he's destroyed.
yusei:save it i activate solemn judgement.
kiryu:did i mention.speed world is now legal.
yusei:i end my turn.
kiryu:i set 1 card face-down and end my turn.
yusei:i summon speed warrior in atk mode and attack.
kiryu:i activate Sacrifice of Honor.
yusei:i end my turn.
kiryu:i summon Earthbound Immortal Wiraqocha Rasca and activate it's effect.i activate dark hole.
yusei:i activate Starlight Road and specail summon Stardust Dragon.
kiryu:i end my turn.
yusei:wait.i also specail summon Stardust Xiaolong.
kiryu:i end my turn.
yusei:i summon Salvation Dragon - Savior Dragon and synchro summon savior star dragon and attack your earthbound immortal.
*kiryu faint's*
yusei:KIRYU!!!
crow:so i guess the duel was hard.
yusei:i just hope jack can defeat grieger..

not badd. but i dont think you can solemn the activation of a monsters effect. the only thing solemn can negate that belongs to a monster is its summoning i bleive.

Ryan wrote:

i dont think you can solemn the activation of a monsters effect. the only thing solemn can negate that belongs to a monster is its summoning i beleive.

correct.not to it's effect.

effect wrote:

When a "Sun Dragon Inti" on your field is destroyed and sent to the Graveyard, Special Summon this card from your Graveyard.

you can chain it to a specail summon :/

**CHAPTER 6:jack vs grieger**
jack:okay.let's duel.
grieger:i summon trap reactor and end my turn.
jack:i specail summon vice dragon in atk mode.now i summon Dark Resonator in atk mode and tune my lv 5 vice dragon with my lv 3 Dark Resonator (The ruler's heartbeats will now file through here! Take witness to its creation-shaking power! Synchro Summon! My very soul, Red Demons Dragon!).i attack with red dragon archfiend.i end my turn.
grieger:i activate monster reborn and specail summon trap reactor - Y FI in atk mode.i set 1 card face-down and summon spell reactor.i end my turn.
jack:i sacrifice red dragon archfiend to summon strong wind dragon(5400 atk) it atk mode.i atk your trap reactor.
grieger.i activate fake explosion and specail summon summon reactor - SK in atk mode.
jack:i end my turn with 2face-down's.
grieger:i specail summon Flying Fortress SKY FIRE and activate its effect.
jack:i activate Compulsory Evacuation Device.
grieger:i end my turn.
jack:i atk with strong wind dragon.
*grieger spins out*
*grieger disappears*
jack:i wonder if those 2 finished yet.
yusei:hey jack.
crow:how was the duel?
jack:easy.but we still have to defeat ghost.
crow:yeah.
yusei(shocked):guys its 11:51 PM.
crow:we have to hurry.
jack:he's on the other side of domino city.
crow:we can still make it.
jack:but crow..
crow:listen.the dark signers took my family.
yusei:we know.
crow:if we dont beat ghost then it wont be safe anymore.
jack:he does have the power to split domino city like last time.
yusei:lets go.

i add a pic of them riding there D-wheels.